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Gentleman Prefer Blondes - Destination Canada

*This is a journal by Lorelei whom is not very intelligent and in the book by Anita loos it is written with spelling errors.

June 25^th:

The cold wether in New York has finaly set in providing Dorothy and I with a desperate scurry, to secure a new winter cloak. I have herd of a new suitor being in town, one by the name of Mr Broderick. He sounds charming, the heir to a massive fortune of an oil well somewhere in Canadia . I know Canadians aren’t very interesting but it is not one’s fault being bought up around servants with little sense of humour. I was lucky to have been able to be taught charm. he I expect shall be my new acquaintance, as soon as I discover if his trust is only followed by fund. I am hoping to charm him at a gala for some famous European painter. Lorelei you can charm your way with the French, the British and the American, soon to be Canadian as well.            

I will let you know how it goes hopefully Dorothy doesn’t say too much like last time, that was a night of wasted stockings. I mean she has always been around when I am told I am the thinker of the two, hence why Mr Eisman gave me these diaries, to create mini encyclopedias of my thoughts.

June 30^th:

The other evening was a swell evening at the least. He called on me the very next day and to 5th Avenue it was as he noticed I was shivering all of the evening. He has since bought me my lovely and soft fox fur coat. I believe I heard his servant giving him a meassage from tiffanys so I  except some very expensive and tasteful diamond assortment soon. I am working my charm with him ever so well I believe he will be taking me to Canada very soon.

We were having lunch at the Ritz today and Mr Broderick said he is very delighted by Dorothy also and has a friend in Canada whom shall apparently fall all over her and lavish her with gifts, a brunette man of course. Dorothy is very cute but a silly girl only just do brunette men look past me and to her.  We quarrel so often lately as she is not very active in her puursuit of a husband such as I. This diary is proving very tricky, as I have to be ready so ever early as Mr Broderick is a very early riser and I never know when it is he will call. So early infact I am worried I have not had any beauty sleep in this whole time since meeting him. And, Tomorrow we shall go drinking champagne and dancing, I do hope to see him dance but only if he is any good, like I am.

July 6^th:

It is agreed Dorothy and I will be leaving on the first train the day after next escorted by Mr Broderick. He was in such a jolly mood on the Independence Day, sherry always has this affect on him he says. So I have decided to take a bottle with me as to ensure he is always jolly when feeling down. He asked me if I was a lady as true to him as he knows and gave me a necklace so full of diamonds my eyes sparkled so. We are going to meet his father who is very old and very sick. Meaning he will be very busy and important taking over the business. I am working on a proposal, as a busy man will leave me at my will to shop and charm my way up in society. I am very good in controlling my self and not giving him any part of me as to make me more of a temptation than I already am. Dorothy is ever so excited to meet this man, he has written her and invited her to stay. We both have so much to do. We need to pack and empty our deposit boxes of all our jewellery we have aquired over Europe and America. Oh how to handle with such little time?

July 7^th:

The most awful think has happened. It is unthinkable. I will not even been getting out if bed today, possibly ever again. Oh why the fates are against such a smart girl like me at this time? My previous fiancé Harry has come to New York as he heard of my travel plans. He has informed Mr Broderick that I attempted to kill him, as he was a cheat. It was just a sleeping drug so I could take my things and leave without becoming so upset caught in an argument with him. It was more a concern for my life than for his.

I have just received a letter, I shall still remain in the confines of my bed, but I am a fractionally less distraught. Mr Broderick was very charmed by me he has said that I am to stay here and he will call for me after he has spoken with his mother. Mothers always love me and Fathers, but he is too sick and his mother must stay with him. So Dorothy will still go and fight my case with her potential new suitor and explain to Mrs Broderick the real predicament I was in and again will be if I do not get her blessing, and that all I shall ask of her is a meeting. I just hope Dorothy does not overspeak where not necessary and her unrefinement does not reflect badly on me. I am ever so ill by this news Harry brought, I hope one day I can recover.

10 FanFic- Shay

Jane Eyre
This is a simple retelling of Jane Eyres arrival to Rochester, in the modern world. Taking the elegance and beauty from a famous love story with a beautiful setting, to the busy technology riddled society of today. It is told in a first person point of view through the eyes of Jen Reye.

Sixteen Candles
After Sam has her awful week and everyone forgets her birthday, she finally gets the boy of her dreams Jake Ryan. When the film ends he has a cake for her and a kiss, this is of the next day and a continuation of the love story from the eighties we all wanted to know about. It has a third person point of view. It works as it is a highschool sweethearts romance story.

Life after Loss (Harry Potter)
This is told in third person point of view it is a snippet from post Harry Potter, after the battle of Hogwarts and Fred was killed. This story works as it has humour, grief all tying up to the final Harry Potter book and the humour is inline with that of J K Rowlings. It also leaves suspense in the ending line and questions as to how who when with the mention of the knife. It engages the reader to explore and want to read more.

Malcolm In the Middle
This is in the future beyond the series of Malcom in the Middle where Malcom is off to harvard. It is a very emotional piece told though first person from Reeces' eyes. It takes too much away from the humour of Malcom in the Middle. To lighten it up they possible needed t add in another brother. However, the story did relate to the brothers well and you could get the sense of feeling from Malcom and Reece that they would react in a similar way had it been a show which aired.

Titanic 
The only thing in this piece relevant to the titanic is Jack and Rose. Otherwise it is set in highschool in the eighties and Jack is an Orphan and Rose is his girlfriend. Jack still contains his cheeky naughty cabin boy humour and way and he still thinks Rose is beautiful and holds he on a pedestal. It is writen in third person point of view. It is a crossover of characters from the Titanic and a crossover of setting with Ferris Buellers Day off.

Matilda 
This is in third person point of view however i feel that there is too much  dialogue. through this it crams too much information and major points of the story Matilda into one chapter. I like the introduction of a friend for Matilda who is ballsy otherwise i am not a fan of this piece. Takes away the fear of Ms Trunchball, and the build up of love and hope we all have for Matilda. 

Never Been Kissed 
This story is quite interesting as it is in frist person point of view through Sams eyes. The majority of the film is Josie and her voicing her feelings, you can only sense his. Now you have his demons battling inside him on paper it is very relevant to the story and could have happened.I like how he refers back to the penguins alot to try and distract himself from thinking of Josie but then he just bounces back into something deeper about her and his want for her.

Cry Baby 


This is a chapter from within the movie where Allison square falls for Cry Baby a Drape, so low trailer trash drape and upper middle class squares. It is told in first person point of view through Allisons eyes. It is a romantic segment and shows cry baby in an innocent vulnerable way that she has not, nor anyone seen him before. It works as Allison would have a fight with her over controlling Grandmother and Cry Baby would to alot for Allison in the first stage of lust in their relationship. 


To Kill a Mockingbird
This is in first person point of view. Boo Radley was a simple man whom was always a mystery in the book. To have this piece written through his eyes is very interesting and touching the way he thinks children need help trouble. This being such a turning point and moot point in the story it is focused really well and is done effectively. 


Noughts and Crosses
I like the way the piece is written in chapters under names of the characters and then written through their point of view. It is interesting to have Callum alive as it changes so many outcomes in the following books. However, the characters have been adapted well, the worrying Sephy, the evil sinister Jude and the lost boy Callum.

Emma's Fanfiction, The Science of Sleep: Le Bateau de Rêve/The Boat of Dreams

Stephanie is stroking his hair. Her hand feels nice, soft and comforting. Is she really stroking his hair, or is this just a dream? Please let this be real he thinks, but he doesn't really care anymore. He is beginning to regret those harsh things he said to her, well it is true that he does like her boobs because they look friendly and unpretentious. He hadn’t meant to offend her but maybe she didn’t see it as the compliment it was intended to be. Stephanie’s fingers lightly run down his neck and onto his shoulders. Stephane is proud of her for finishing the mezzanine. He likes it up here, being high up from the ground closer to the sky. "Stephane m'aimes-tu? Faut-il aller pour une voile de notre bateau?" Stephanie says softly in his ear bringing Stephane back from his thoughts. "Huh?" Stephane mumbles. "Please no French Stephanie it makes my head hurt". Stephanie laughs, throwing her head back, dark hair falling down her back. “Viens maintenant imbecile, come Stephane lets go”. She says as she grabs his hand.

They are both sitting on Golden the Pony Boy whose fabric is rough and worn, with its edges fraying between its large white cotton stitches. Stephanie’s arms are around his waist and her head resting against his shoulder as they gallop through the trees. “Look!” Stephanie shouts pointing a long finger to the ground ahead.  The one-second time machine is lying discarded, its wires curling and twisting amongst the dry autumn leaves.  "We can't leave it behind ", says Stephane jumping down to pick it up. He flicks the switches forwards in time, backwards in time. Nothing, a frown depends on his face, “I think it’s broken”. Stephane says as he passes Stephanie the machine. “We’ll take it with us and you can fix it on the boat” She suggests.

 

The little wooden boat of trees is waiting for them, it creeks as it jumps up and down in the blue water of the lake made of cellophane. “It looks perfect Stephane, I think we did a good job” says Stephanie, smiling at their creation, “the amount of white cellophane you added is perfect!” She cups her hands over her ears as the wind whistles around them, blowing her hair in swirls around her head.  “Although I did not imagine it to be so stormy, but I suppose that makes it all the more exciting!”  They set Golden the Pony Boy free so he can roam the grassy fields, his golden mane and tail made from pieces of string stream behind him as he gallops away.  

Stephane’s head is bent over his one-second time machine he is fixing as they sit in the boat with the land moving gradually into the distance. His hair is blowing across his face and in his eyes and the boat is rolling on the swell of the lake. But he doesn’t seem to notice as he concentrates, his fingers fiddling with the wires and switches “There!” he says as he holds up the fixed time machine triumphantly. “I have always been good with my hands”.  “Oui oui, I know” Stephanie answers. “Come here Stephane” she says and pats the ground where she sits.

They lie in the boat amongst the trees and look up at the darkening sky. Pieces of blue and white cellophane are flying up and landing in the boat around them, some are getting caught in the spindly branches of the trees. The wild animals are chasing each other across the red felt blanket with the large white stitches keeping them warm from the fresh evening air as they lie curled up together. Over the noise of the wind they can hear the cardboard city across the water with the loud beeping of cardboard cars, the rattling subways and musical sirens. Unexpectedly Stephanie leans closer to him, so close he can see, even in the dim light, the yellow flecks in her brown eyes. Please let this be real Stephane thinks again, he has been waiting for what seems like forever for this moment. He is surprised he hasn’t grown old; a grey beard long and wiry sprouting from his chin and his hands turning gnarled, wrinkled and weathered. Slowly their lips meet.

Suddenly Stephane hears a voice surrounding him and he reluctantly pulls away from Stephanie, “Come in action two, can you complete the mission?” “Come in action two can you complete the mission?” It keeps repeating itself, getting louder and louder. He puts his fingers in his ears. Stephanie is laughing at him. Why is she laughing? Stephane opens his eyes, his white-washed bedroom ceiling stares back at him. He groans and reaches for his alarm clock, “come in action two can y...” the voice stops. Stephane lets his eyes fall shut again, “I love you Stephanie God damn it!”

Sapphires fanfiction picks briefly analysed.

What I did this summer-Glee

The first Fanfic I looked at was a cross-over between Glee and Buffy. The fanfic was told in the second person through Brittany's perspective. I really enjoyed this cross-over. It had some humour in it and the author stayed true to the character of Brittany. It was quite interesting reading about how Brittany reacted to her experiences in such a serious environment,her character is always portrayed as somebody that acts 'aloof' and does not seem all there. Instead of the fanfic being a story about one event the fanfic included various events throughout a time frame, the author separated these events by a single line. By separating each event within the story it made the fanfic easier to read and understand.

New Betty-Ugly Betty

This Fanfic was based on the main character Betty Suarez. It portrayed an alternate universe where Betty is presented as a sophisticated young assistant and not the clumsy inexperienced character that we are used to. The story was written in and contained mostly dialogue said between the characters. The author tried to focus on small details to help the reader focus on specific aspects of the setting. A good way the author achieved this was by describing the state of Betty's teeth compared to Marc's.

With just one blink of an eye-Slum dog Millionaire

This fanfic was told from Latika's point of view and is set in the slum's when Latika and Jamal were still children. Although this fan fiction kept with the story of Slum dog Millionaire I felt that the author was not telling the story through the eyes of a child but through the viewpoint of an adult. The author said things like 'my dreams were of Jamal, living in a house with our family. Two boys and one girl' which is something a small child does not really think about. This made the fanfic sound a little inaccurate. I did like how the author described the setting e.g. 'the sound of fire crackling filled the air', it made the story interesting and more enjoyable to read.

The Gangsta Conundrum-Based on Dan Brown's Da Vinci Code series

Although this fan fiction is yet to be completed I found this story very humorous. The author took a much debated novel and turned it into what seems like a comedy, they even go on to say that the story they have written is a 'piss poor knock off'. Although this may offend some people I thought it was a refreshing change from the other fan fiction stories based on the Da Vinci Code series that tend to focus more on serious aspects of the novel. The chapters that were written were very easy to read even though they were mostly made up of dialogue with very little introduction to the setting. The author also tried to change the name of the main character the story was based on (Robert Langdon to Bobert Lungdon), this could have been done to make the readers laugh. Overall I enjoyed this rather short fanfic.

How Phil got injured- The Hangover

The author of this fanfiction has decided to write a background story of an unexplained event that happened in the movie The Hangover. Written in third person this story contained a lot of dialogue that seemed to fit well with the characters. This fanfiction in my opinion is believable because the author has tied it in to fit the original story. They have not introduced any new characters but have simply tried to explain to those who have watched movie, what might have happened to Phil. This fanfic would be more suitable for an adult reader because of the use of use of swear words, guns (etc).

Precious Memories-WALL-E

Based on the Pixar Comedy WALL-E this fanfiction was a brief insight what a normal day for wall-e might be like. While this story had a lot of description I found that the story was lacking some excitement. The author ends the fanfic with 'what precious memories teenagers carry' this makes it seem as if the whole reason for their story is to write about teenagers. I thought that writing about humans while relating it to the movie WALL-E, was a little inaccurate in terms of the story line because the main character (wall-e) has never been in contact with a human before. The fanfic was overall easy to read and the description of the setting was well written.

I'm a famous movie character get me out of here!-Pirates of the Caribbean, Harry Potter (etc)

This fanfiction is a crossover between Pirates of the Caribbean, Harry potter and Disney. The author took selected characters and placed them in a different setting. This is the first fanfiction I have read that has done this and I thought that this approach to fanfiction writing was enjoyable to read. The story was very humorous and the author has used the same mannerisms that the characters use in their movies. This allowed me to see how each character would relate to each other in a different environment. There were a few spelling mistakes (Larry instead of Harry) but the mistakes did not make the story difficult to read or understand.

tingting's ten fanictions

Harry Potter and Lord of the Rings Crossover

The fanfiction has written by third person. It is a crossover of the Harry Potter and the Lord of the rings. This is using past tense to write the story. It is quite different from the movie. In this fanfic, the write wrote the Harry becomes Dumbledore and the goal he was working on is make his age and the physical body match. The story use Harry’s point of view of watching his funeral show the story is crossover. He is outside of his life and he is like another person to watch his own life in the real world.

Princess Diaries and Princess Diaries Crossover

This fanfiction is written in the first person. It use Mia’s point of view to write her own dairies. The fanfic use past tense and present tense. It uses many dialogs to show her talking to her friend, and it is also like a sequel of the movie. She becomes of the queen of the country; even it describes her awful queen life.  The fanfic leaves the wonder to the reader it says they will be going to make the story more fun.

Anybody Out There?

This fandiction is written by third person and second person combine together. It’s kind of different from the fanfic we normally read. The story uses past tense. It’s like two persons are in the story and one is telling us the story one is the narrative the story. Actually, the second person is the inside of Kathleen(the narration). It’s really interesting that story has got two personalities.

Twilight  

The fanfiction is written by first person. It’s about Bella first get to her father’s house, and it use past tense to write the story. It also describes herself heart talking. It’s all about Bella first seen the town and the house even the car her father gave to her. There is little bit about the first impression of Edward.  It’s just a narration when the story starts.

Catch Me Now

This is told in first person point of view through the whole story. There are not much of the dialogues; it’s more about personal thinking and talking. It’s written by present tense. It’s not a funny story, it’s like the author said I might a little bit lost in the story. I thinks the story is saying a teenager  struggle about what she has done in the school and her crazy life.

Secret Between Us » What it means to be alive

This is a sad story. The narration is scared of her father, because he will beat her when he is drunk. It’s written by first person and using past tense. It’s really showing how her life is awful. She was looking forward the new life, however her father break her hope. She is so hopeless even could cry. In the story, the verb writes of how violent her father is and point out how good Allan is, because he saved her from the bad man.

Six of Hearts series » Angelic Voices

The fanfiction has written by third person and it use past tense to write about it. It has used a word for a paragraph which point out what the author was trying to present which is how the ACE is worrying about Six and she is waiting for call from Six. There are only a few dialogues to show the talking of Ace and Six. It shows how they cares of each other and Ace is willing to make a date with him.

Last Vampire series » More Than One Choice
The fanfic is written by third person and it use past tense to create the story. It is like a magic story which is talking about a woman who is vampire is trying to kill everyone who knows the truth. The story uses a lot of the dialogues to shows the woman is making the dead or alive decision for the man she is chasing. The story even tells the story backwards and has a not too bad ending to finish the story. she didn't kill anyone. she felt love of the man.


Material Girl » Conspirators

That is a comics which is funny because is about two sweaters is talking about their owner. It uses third person to describe the story and past tense is to be used.  In the text, there are pretty much dialogues but they are not too boring. These two sweaters are acting like a people they feel sad that their owner doesn’t wear them anymore; they couldn’t accept the truth that they actually are forgotten.  

Pretty in Pink » Dreaming In Pink

The text is using past tense and third person to write the story, it is about a meet of Andie and Eric. It is a love story. There are more distributions of Eric and how they feel to each other.  It is quite romantic because the boy is being looking the girl for a long time. Although it seems complicated at first, because the relationship between Andie and Blaine even Duckie, as the story going I can find out the two main characters who are Andie and Eric. The fanfic has a happy ending which everyone would love to see.

Emma's 10 Fanfictions

Arthurian Mythology: Daughter of the Ever-Changing Sea

This piece of Fan Fiction is based on the Arthurian character Morgan, half sister of King Arthur. In 3822 words the story covers briefly Morgans life from when she was a child, her mother dying, growing up in a convent, meeting her half brother Arthur, plotting his death, ending up having a an affair with Arthur, getting pregnant to him then bringing up her son to hate his father. It is written in present tense and in third person narrative. Although it seems there is a lot going on and it was a tiny bit confusing with the sudden change in time frame, it actually has a very good narrative and this author definitely has a talent for story telling.

The vampire Chronicles: Third time's the Charm

A piece of Fan Fiction is based on two characters from Anne Rice's Vampire Chronicles: Lestat and Louis. In this story Lestat appears to be wounded and Louis heals him by offering him some of his blood. Is is slightly confusing as to exactly what context this story is in as the environment, time or setting are not really stated. It is written in third person, which is unusual for Anne Rice as she usually writes in first person. The way this is written is trying to mimic the unique and descriptive way Anne Rice does and actually achieves this quite well, however I feel that the choice of words are sometimes over-thought and therefore do not fit too well.

Outlander: From the Journals of Lord John Gray

This piece of Fan Fiction is written in first person and is a scene from the perspective of Lord John Gray a more lesser character from Diana Gabaldon's Outlander series. The narrative is great and so similar to that of Diana Gabaldon that it could easily be mistaken as hers. The author shows a very good understanding of the original character's personalities and mannerisms, including incorporating the character Jamie's Scottish accent in the text such as "I ken ye well...". Overall this is lovely piece of writing by a promising writer.

Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind: Because We're Meant for Each Other

This piece of Fan Fiction is based from Michel Gondry's film 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind'. In this story the main characters Joel and Clementine have recently erased their memories of being together but in a strange way they still love each other. It is written in third person and from more of Joel's side although it is not from his POV. The narrative is good, although in comparison to the movie this story is a lot more low key.






Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet: As Garlic Cloves and Butter

This piece of Fan Fiction is a scene with the characters Mercutio and Benvolio from Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet. The scene involves them discussing Romeo's new sickly infatuation with an un-named girl (obviously Juliet). It is written in third person and the dialogue is very Shakespearean but not to the extent that it is confusing. The writer does a very good job of setting this scene in Verona and the comical characters are captured true to Shakespeare's originals.

How I Met You Mother: What Remains

This piece of Fan Fiction is based from the popular television series 'How I met you Mother'. In this story the womanising character Barney is on his way to tell Robyn his feelings for her. It is written in present tense although it changes to past tense as he thinks back in time. The narrative is third person and it is written in a way that suits the original atmosphere of the program. However it is a little unusual to see Barney as a more thoughtful and contemplative character in this story in comparison to his original character who definitely is not.






Slumdog Millionaire: Holding your Heart

This piece of Fan Fiction is a story based from the movie Slumdog Millionaire. It centres on the character Latika as she thinks about her love for Jamal and how her being considered beautiful is a blessing as well a curse. Being beautiful has led her to into great harm but has also saved her from much worse circumstances. It is written in third person. The writer clearly loves the story of Slumdog Millionaire and understands the characters well, however overall the quality of writing is a little weak.

Homer's Odyssey: Hope Gone

This piece of Fan Fiction is from the cannon of Homer's odyssey. The story is about Odysseus's return home to the Greek Island of Ithaca, after a long an arduous journey from the battle of Troy. It is in past tense and in first person and told from the point of view (POV) of the character Amphinomous, one of Penelope's many suitors. This was supposedly written for a school English assignment which is quite surprising as I think it is written exceptionally well.

Pan's Labyrinth/El Laberinto del Fauno: Most Humble Servant

This piece of Fan Fiction is based from Guilliermo del T0ro's film Pan's Labyrinth. This story jumps from the main character Ofelia sitting with her pregnant mother to when she is in bed where Pan the faun comes and visits her. Fundamentally the story is about Pan's great love for the girl Ofelia which this writer captures beautifully. The narrative is simple but very effective and is written in third person and in past-tense.

Amelie: Flashlight Friendship

This piece of Fan Fiction is based from Jean-Pierre Jeunet's beautiful film Amelie. The story briefly describes the main character Amelie's childhood in comparison to that of Nino her eventual love interest and creates a scene where they meet as children via flashlight morse-code. It is written in past tense and third person narrative but is not very well constructed and a deep understanding of the characters clearly doesn't exist. The film is a hugely imaginative one but unfortunately this story lacks depth and creativity.